LGBG here. My pal Scotty thinks the poem should end "the day smells of worm."
I like it. A lot. I've been mulling it around and I think it's better. I like the singular word better than plural. I like the image of worm-sniffing - the whole thing.
The only thing is, I thought up the whole thing when I went outside and smelled frogs. I actually smelled frogs. So anyway - If I ever publish a book of weather haiku, I'm going with Scotty's edit.
LGBG here. My pal Scotty thinks the poem should end "the day smells of worm."
ReplyDeleteI like it. A lot. I've been mulling it around and I think it's better. I like the singular word better than plural. I like the image of worm-sniffing - the whole thing.
The only thing is, I thought up the whole thing when I went outside and smelled frogs. I actually smelled frogs. So anyway - If I ever publish a book of weather haiku, I'm going with Scotty's edit.