Sunday, August 17, 2008

Current Denver Weather. In Haiku.



The rain will not stop
slugs march, leaving trails of snot
the day smells of frogs.


2 comments:

  1. LGBG here. My pal Scotty thinks the poem should end "the day smells of worm."

    I like it. A lot. I've been mulling it around and I think it's better. I like the singular word better than plural. I like the image of worm-sniffing - the whole thing.

    The only thing is, I thought up the whole thing when I went outside and smelled frogs. I actually smelled frogs. So anyway - If I ever publish a book of weather haiku, I'm going with Scotty's edit.

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