Sunday, August 17, 2008

Current Denver Weather. In Haiku.

The rain will not stop
slugs march, leaving trails of snot
the day smells of frogs.


  1. LGBG here. My pal Scotty thinks the poem should end "the day smells of worm."

    I like it. A lot. I've been mulling it around and I think it's better. I like the singular word better than plural. I like the image of worm-sniffing - the whole thing.

    The only thing is, I thought up the whole thing when I went outside and smelled frogs. I actually smelled frogs. So anyway - If I ever publish a book of weather haiku, I'm going with Scotty's edit.



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